Loopy Dane posted a comment on Monday 9th January 2006 11:43pm

Wow. Very cool. You threw me for a loop with that last part though. I though perhaps that this was a harry/multi with his four advisors. Nice bit of mis-direction. Interesting world you have set up here. Will the goblins actually move money on the ministry's say- so? Or is the oath everyone swore enough to be construed as directions from the account-holder (limiting the power of harry's regime appropriately). Thanks for a thought-provoking piece. It would be interesting to see how Harry will set up succession to his "throne".

hedwig_edwiges posted a comment on Sunday 8th January 2006 7:01am

ok, very interesting approach. we will see more of this story?

Coolone007 posted a comment on Sunday 25th December 2005 11:23am

Are you abandoning this story?

Rheya Ramsey posted a comment on Sunday 25th December 2005 4:22am

Original spell by Katherine Kurtz, in Deryni Rising:

Part 1, given by Charissa, the Shadowed One, to Kelson Haldane, 14 year old King of Gwynedd, after she interrupts his coronation:

By Earth and Water, Fire and Air
I conjure powers to flee this Ring.
I clear it now. Let all beware.
Through here shall pass no living thing.

Kelson's response:

Inside, all Space and Time suspend.
From here may nothing outward flee
Or inward come. The circle ends
When two are one and one is free.

Original challenge/endspell, part 1, given by Kelson:

And now, Charissa, this must end.
I shall no more my powers lend
To please thy fancy. I defend
My people, and thy power rend.

I swear by every Holy Name
That I shall thwart they evil aim.
And further, I refute thy claim
that Good and Evil are the same.

Therefore, gird ye for the fray.
This is the final duel, we say...
For while we live, the light of day
Shall cease till thou art done away!

Charissa's response:

Thy boasts are fearsome, little lord,
But I fear not thy lofty word.
Threats are easy to afford.

But I, too, weary of this game,
So I accept thy test of flame.
Beware! Tis I who rise to fame!

And when this little farce is done,
Then death shall come to Brion's son,
And I shall be the ruling one!

The next two paragraphs after these in your story, contain almost word for word sentences from the next four paragraphs of Deryni Rising.

Your story is very good. My only problem is not crediting Deryni Rising and Katherine Kurtz with at least inspiration. I love the world of Gwynedd and the Deryni, and have had these books a long time. It was this very book that brought me into that world the first time, and the end of the book and the confrontation between Charissa and Kelson is one of my favorites, so I instantly recognized the spells.

I want you finish your story, I did enjoy it, I just want you to give credit where credit is due.

Meghan posted a comment on Friday 23rd December 2005 3:50am

fabulous, I hope you will find the time to update it. :)

James Benfield posted a comment on Wednesday 7th December 2005 1:30pm

great so far, looking foward to more chapters!

James

nancy in chicago posted a comment on Thursday 1st December 2005 5:18am

I love it!!! I want to see what the 'personal services' are that Harry alludes to.

Interesting how the Black sisters came up with the same thing. And Hermione is very understandable in her horror at the idea.

I don't know where you are going with that bit (and Draco -- I can just see Harry setting Narcissa up as a play on Draco's sensibilities) I mean, having your Mum be declared a whore in public (or technically, cortesan, I'd guess) is probably more interesting for Harry to watch, than her skills in bed ... well ... it depends on his morals & her skills, I'd guess.

nancy in chicgao

m39303 posted a comment on Sunday 27th November 2005 5:30pm

Very nice. you should continue the story.

M.

turnlach posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 8:55am

Totally awesome.

Come on....please continue with this story.

Please please please please

Arkeus posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd November 2005 4:26am

Shudder. ah well, at least hermione is her own, though i do like hhr :/
sniff. Good work :-)
hope things go well in fidelius.

Jamey posted a comment on Tuesday 22nd November 2005 4:11am

Interesting story line. I do hope this actually is still "In Progress" and not abandoned, though I do understand how a story can just lose you at some point.

I don't think Harry really has to worry about Narcissa and Belladona - I suspect they will have killed each other by the time he gets to the Red Room. How Hermione would react would be very interesting. Or maybe he'll put them in some kind of stasis, run wires up through them, and turn them into matching lamps for his bedside. (Maybe he can get Lemiwinks to run the wires for him).

His judgements have been fair so far, but very stern - something the British Wizarding World has needed for some time, apparently. I love the story so far - I really do hope it continues.

minervakitty posted a comment on Monday 21st November 2005 11:21pm

hehe This wasn't what the wizarding world expected? Is there going to be more in this story? What about the Dursley? Where's their just rewards?

Jamie46 posted a comment on Sunday 20th November 2005 9:36pm

Wow. I like it. A tad devious; I don't think I've seen another fic where all fighters were Oath-bound to submit to the judgement of the winner. Very interesting. I like how Harry established precedent :) that was cool. I seriously thought there was gonna be a punchline as far as the Black sisters were concerned... Interesting that Harry's gonna *ahem* be entertained by them tonight. I honestly thought that this was gonna be another "Harry gets Tonks and Ginny and Hermione and..." fic, but from Hermione's disapproval, I can see that that's not it at all. :) A rather unique take. Well-done!

(And long as heck, too, but never slow!)

Peter Clark posted a comment on Monday 14th November 2005 9:28am

I can't help but wonder if the 'personal services' they offer won't be as maids in the castle :)

Love the story line - always nice to see a decent after-the-end story. Hope that you continue it as it seems OK as a one-shot, but would do better with a short (or more?) conclusion.

Wytil posted a comment on Thursday 27th October 2005 8:02pm

Lord Gryffindor has returned.

Mark4 posted a comment on Wednesday 26th October 2005 2:13pm

Absolutely great story. While you left this in a spot that would be easy to just call it a one-shot I really hope that you continue this story. If you could update either this one or Harry Potter and the Junior Year Abroad it would be awesome

JJMarsden posted a comment on Saturday 8th October 2005 7:09am

All those who say keep it up are seconded. This is good, though I suspect you [and the Black sisters] are Up To Something. That's generally the case. I want to know what. Write mroe please

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Tuesday 4th October 2005 1:01am

Hell of a cliffhanger.

The Resident posted a comment on Friday 30th September 2005 10:34am

Excellent, but... somehow incomplete. I think at least a chapter the size of this one to tie up loose ends. I do hope that you look favorably upon this suggestion. keep writting, you are very good at it.

Adam posted a comment on Wednesday 28th September 2005 5:00am

Ok I was enjoying this story right up until the very end. how he dealt with Hermione was rather brutal and his sentencing of the sisters was odd. I know he is male and they offered but his decision was a little odd considering some of the other punishments he handed out. After all Bella was a known murderer and torturer - so just because she offered her body why should she get off?